Good introduction- you include the necessary elements and establish the main idea of the passage as well as the focus of your commentary. A thematic approach could be very successful for this passage, and you have a strong understanding of the universal themes that Munro is commenting on. With that in mind, you need to take a figurative step back and focus more precisely on the content of this passage and how Munro establishes these themes through her literary craft. This requires additional focus on specific literary features or even approaching this passage with greater awareness of character and why Munro specifically crafted characters the way she did. Consider their behaviour, actions, and reactions as carefully thought out by Munro to achieve the theme you examine. This applies to your analysis of setting as well. Your understanding is very strong, but you do not approach your analysis with an awareness of Munro’s craft. More specific evidence and analysis of that evidence is required.
Your language choice is often very eloquent, but don’t sacrifice clarity for idiom. A few pauses and slow pacing will not affect your language score, but perhaps with additional practice and confidence will allow you to articulate your ideas faster and demonstrate an overall greater understanding of the text.
Good introduction- you include the necessary elements and establish the main idea of the passage as well as the focus of your commentary. A thematic approach could be very successful for this passage, and you have a strong understanding of the universal themes that Munro is commenting on. With that in mind, you need to take a figurative step back and focus more precisely on the content of this passage and how Munro establishes these themes through her literary craft. This requires additional focus on specific literary features or even approaching this passage with greater awareness of character and why Munro specifically crafted characters the way she did. Consider their behaviour, actions, and reactions as carefully thought out by Munro to achieve the theme you examine. This applies to your analysis of setting as well. Your understanding is very strong, but you do not approach your analysis with an awareness of Munro’s craft. More specific evidence and analysis of that evidence is required.
ReplyDeleteYour language choice is often very eloquent, but don’t sacrifice clarity for idiom. A few pauses and slow pacing will not affect your language score, but perhaps with additional practice and confidence will allow you to articulate your ideas faster and demonstrate an overall greater understanding of the text.